5-7 sentences on the parting statement someone made?
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Yeah, I remember having the same issue once. I needed to write 5-7 sentences on the foyer. I think I wrote 3-4 sentences and got a comment back stating to follow all narrative requirements. It just made me chuckle because I really thought it was completely ridiculous.
I did one of these and the lady contacted me and said I needed to add to the narrative because I only had 3 sentences...I told her 3 sentences was a stretch as it was...She said copy and paste what you wrote and repeat yourself...I did it and 3 sentences became 6 and it passed!
I have actually said in my narrative, "What is there to say? I walked by the hostess station. She said good bye. I walked out. The foyer was clean. I went through the door."
So I gave them their five sentences while pointing out how ridiculous it was to expect five sentences about something that took three seconds to occur.
So I gave them their five sentences while pointing out how ridiculous it was to expect five sentences about something that took three seconds to occur.
Time to build a bigger bridge.
@dspeakes wrote:
I have actually said in my narrative, "What is there to say? I walked by the hostess station. She said good bye. I walked out. The foyer was clean. I went through the door."
So I gave them their five sentences while pointing out how ridiculous it was to expect five sentences about something that took three seconds to occur.
And here I've been editing things like that out of my reports because I thought it was a bit too snarky!
I know you are just commenting on how ridiculous the request is, and I agree. But if you had to come up with 5 sentences, remember it doesn't have to sound nice, just:
The foyer was clean when I entered. I did not see any dirt on the floor. I did not see any spills on the floor. I did not see any grime on the walls. It was still clean when I left.
Still a ridiculous requirement, though.
The foyer was clean when I entered. I did not see any dirt on the floor. I did not see any spills on the floor. I did not see any grime on the walls. It was still clean when I left.
Still a ridiculous requirement, though.
Hmmm... the 5 short lines sound a little like Dr. Seuss, don't they?
5 sentences ... well, a limerick is five lines so I'll take a stab at it.
This here was a high-scored employer
until taking a peek at the foyer.
I hate to speak ill,
but there was a spill,
and I slipped so I'm calling my lawyer!
There are two types of people in this world: Those who can extrapolate from incomplete data.
5 sentences ... well, a limerick is five lines so I'll take a stab at it.
This here was a high-scored employer
until taking a peek at the foyer.
I hate to speak ill,
but there was a spill,
and I slipped so I'm calling my lawyer!
Hahahahaha, thanks for the laugh LJ.
<The foyer was clean when I entered. I did not see any dirt on the floor. I did not see any spills on the floor. I did not see any grime on the walls. It was still clean when I left.> " Better!
Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 03/26/2015 10:01PM by SunnyDays2.
Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 03/26/2015 10:01PM by SunnyDays2.
Be brief and use lots of periods.
The crewmember was a man. He stopped. He said goodbye. The foyer was clean. The sun was shining as I exited through the spotless doors never again to enter and do this stupid shop again.
The crewmember was a man. He stopped. He said goodbye. The foyer was clean. The sun was shining as I exited through the spotless doors never again to enter and do this stupid shop again.
I could write five sentences about the door knob.
You have lighting, floor, ceiling, door, glass, and the state of the foyer stand and the attitude, appearance, and what the person did or did not say as you left.
You have lighting, floor, ceiling, door, glass, and the state of the foyer stand and the attitude, appearance, and what the person did or did not say as you left.
I received an email from the MSC editor today letting me know the report is being forwarded to the client, and thanking me for excellent details. Have to love that...
This sort of thing drives me crazy! Why has quantity become more important than quality? I shop for one company that requires a certain number of characters in each section of the narrative...but you don't find that out until you complete the narrative, then get the red comment, "Narrative must be a minimum of 1000 characters. You have submitted 862." So then I go back and add FLUFF, definitely not more valuable content. Reminds me of high school: a music appreciation paper need to be 8 pages long. One of my friends made sure the first and last pages discussed the topic; those in the middle were about her summer vacation or her pet, something like that. She got an A.
I think we have all been there. I just add sentences that really have nothing to do with what the question was but they are true statements.
@wozswoman wrote:
Sometimes I just do not get how some MSC's expect you to stretch out saying something in five to seven sentences that should or could be said in two.
Example: If a crew member spoke to you what did he/she say? And was the foyer entrance clean and maintained? The foyer area is 4'x4' and the crew member said "have a good afternoon."
My favorite. Five to seven sentences on the cleanliness of the bathroom. *sigh* Why did I take this shop?
I'll try this one:
The bathroom smelled fresh for the most part except for the faint smell of urine near one of the toilets. The urinal was clean except for two cigarette butts. The first toilet stall looked like it had been cleaned recently but also showed signs of recent use by someone with terrible aim. The second toilet stall looked spotless but was out of toilet paper. The sink was working properly, however the hand dryer was out of order and the paper towel dispenser was nearly empty.
Five sentences, could be made into six with a little work.
I always think it's hilarious when an MSC or their client wants a minimum of 5 sentences for a two word parting comment. Makes my eyes roll back in my head. They're kidding, right?
The editors don't like it much either. Just saying'.
"The hostess smiled as we made our way to the door. She said, "Thank you. Have a nice day." She was sincere in her tone. The foyer was clean and free of debris. The exterior of the building was well maintained."
Done.
Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 03/28/2015 01:37AM by geauxcj.
"The hostess smiled as we made our way to the door. She said, "Thank you. Have a nice day." She was sincere in her tone. The foyer was clean and free of debris. The exterior of the building was well maintained."
Done.
Edited 1 time(s). Last edit at 03/28/2015 01:37AM by geauxcj.
I really don't understand the regurgitation of details. Not saying that I don't do the 5-7 sentence it is just so redundant - but whatever the client desires....
The crew member smiled. The crew member said have a nice day. The crew member made eye contact. The crew member was personable. The foyer was sparkling clean.
It cracks me up when I have to talk like that. Now I've gotten into the habit and started doing it when texting with friends. They call me on it LOL.
It cracks me up when I have to talk like that. Now I've gotten into the habit and started doing it when texting with friends. They call me on it LOL.
Avoid any comma's, but and ands. No compound sentences but it must be a complete sentence. Member smiled - no good. Just add "The associate" to everything and viola.
I did not see any number 1. I did not smell any number 1. I did not see any number 2. I did smell number 2 though. I did not make number 2, so don't blame me!
(Perhaps that was a "pharting" statement?)
(Perhaps that was a "pharting" statement?)
Blah Blah Blah!!!!!! Who writes these questionaires???? Am I talking to a computer or a person?
Hey LJ - great idea....here's mine:
I picked up a shop at Ikea....
I was new and had no idea.
The shop was a bust
The no pay was unjust,
And the thought of it gives me diarrhea!
(had trouble rhyming Ikea!)
I picked up a shop at Ikea....
I was new and had no idea.
The shop was a bust
The no pay was unjust,
And the thought of it gives me diarrhea!
(had trouble rhyming Ikea!)
@LJ wrote:
Hmmm... the 5 short lines sound a little like Dr. Seuss, don't they?
5 sentences ... well, a limerick is five lines so I'll take a stab at it.
This here was a high-scored employer
until taking a peek at the foyer.
I hate to speak ill,
but there was a spill,
and I slipped so I'm calling my lawyer!
Doesn't seem like you had any trouble rhyming Ikea! 
The MSC was full of neat tricks
To entice those newbies like Chix
To Ikea she said, "Why not?"
Without giving it much thought
Now she's resorted to writing limericks
To entice those newbies like Chix
To Ikea she said, "Why not?"
Without giving it much thought
Now she's resorted to writing limericks
That's a great one, Chix! 
LOL Chigirl
There are two types of people in this world: Those who can extrapolate from incomplete data.
LOL Chigirl
lol, good discussion, I think their clients really want much narratives to the tee. Sometime, I'm like, do you want me to fabricate and use my imagination like barney the dinosaur. lol
I went to shop a gym today.
I am old and decrepit but needed the pay.
The tour was insane
Gave my legs pain
But not as much pain as writing the report gave my brain.
I am old and decrepit but needed the pay.
The tour was insane
Gave my legs pain
But not as much pain as writing the report gave my brain.
@teriraia wrote:
I went to shop a gym today.
I am old and decrepit but needed the pay.
The tour was insane
Gave my legs pain
But not as much pain as writing the report gave my brain.
I work out a lot, though the only gym shops I would do is ones that does not require a work out, since I like to enjoy a work out and not make it work and mystery shop. Also, I would never ever but tempted to do a ufc workout shop but it required taking a boxing class. I like to work out zumba and lift weights, but not get beat up by boxing, that is just so hard. But I, am slowing down with workout too, since all the workout for my brain when filling out these reports are work out enough mentally and drains me physically.
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