ggeorge -
Way to go! Thanks for the constructively critical feedback that you are providing shoppers. I would second AustinMom's suggestion of getting you into some position of training for other editors.
Could you speak to preferred sentence structure? I recently got a report back from an Intelli-editor for clarification, requesting that, in response to a "no" answer, I directly state that associates were not engaged with customers when I entered the store, this after having opened my narrative by stating that there were no customers present when I entered the store. Receiving an 8 because I had to be contacted in order for such an inane clarification dismayed me far less than seeing what the editor had done to my narrative. It had been turned into a first grade reading primer.
E.g., "All surfaces throughout the store, including the floor, counters, and coolers, were clean and free of debris and stains," had been edited to read, "All surfaces were clean. The floor was clean. The counters were clean. The coolers were clean."
Is this the preferred writing style? If so, I can write this way at the outset, and probably a bit more quickly with practice.
I can string together bullet points. I can offer one detail at a time. I can dispense with narrative. See Spot run.
Please forgive any poorly concealed snark, ggeorge. It is not directed at you.
Thanks for any guidance you can offer.