Editor was having a bad hair day (or works for intellishop). Don't worry about it.
The server asked if I wanted to add a drink to my order but he did not mention anything specifically. He thanked me but did not invite me to return. He smiled frequently and was personable. I waited 15 seconds to order and was not initially offered a sample or a suggestion of what to order. After I received the food, the cashier asked if I wanted to order a drink and offered me a sample of xxxxxxxxx. The xxxxxx's were attractively displayed in a cup. This is a mall location with no restroom. There was no banner on the front of the counter. The xxxxxxx's were not priced. There were no prices shown for the drinks. They were nice and light and a delicious snack without being too filling
I got the same comment on my report. Did you get an 8?
@James Bond 007.5 wrote:
The only thing I can add to the above comments is the narrative seems a bit disjointed, that is, it's out of sequence.
Yes, it is disjointed but that is because it was not a one paragraph narrative. Each sentence (or two) was a specific answer to a question in Sassie, in the order that they were asked. I pulled the answers together to make one paragraph for ease of posting in this forum.